Spent 4 years writing dialogue that nobody would actually say out loud... until my cousin pointed it out
I was at a family BBQ last summer and my cousin (who's a bartender) asked if he could read one of my short stories. He got about 3 pages in and goes "dude, nobody talks like this in real life." He was right. I had characters saying full paragraphs of perfect exposition, no ums, no interruptions, no awkward pauses. Real people talk in fragments, they cut each other off, they say wrong words. So now I sit in coffee shops and literally write down how strangers talk to each other. It's messy but way more authentic. How did you figure out you were doing something wrong in your writing? What tipped you off?